Effect of Going Outside Regularly.
The question of whether or not people are spending enough time outside is one that is highly debated. Many people believe that the general population, especially children in today's day and age aren’t spending nearly as much time outdoors as they should be. Opponents believe that people are spending enough time indoors and that staying inside isn’t a problem at all. As for me, I believe that people should absolutely go outside way more than they currently do. I think that spending time outdoors can be a very peaceful and calming experience, also going outdoors and playing or exercising can be very beneficial to your body and your health, going outdoors can also be helpful to the body as absorbing vitamins from the sun and breathing fresh air is good for the body. I also believe that staying indoors all day can make people act differently and aren’t good for mental health. With all benefits of being outdoors and the negative effects of staying indoors all day taken into consideration, I believe it to be obvious that spending more time outdoors is beneficial in all ways.
Spending a little extra time outdoors each day can be very calming and can create a sense of peace and tranquility. Taking a minute to watch a bird build a nest for its eggs or even watching people shuffle on their way to work in the city can be a pleasant experience too many. Being in a calm environment is something that people need especially in this day and age with all of the stress and turmoil going on in the world taking a break to step outside and sit on a lawn chair or a bench at a park can be a small break from the somewhat harsh truths and hardships that the world around you may possess. Although simply sitting or walking outdoors is enough for many, one should consider exercising or playing sports outside as well.
Exercising outdoors is very important to maintaining a happy healthy body which is why more people should know about the benefits of jogging or playing basketball at a park or even just walking around your neighborhood. A common misconception for those who stay primarily indoors is that exercising is hard and takes a lot of work but one of the best things you can do for yourself is walking which is a very simple task. Walking burns calories and uses your leg muscles which is a good exercise that helps the body and is a far better alternative to staying indoors and playing video games all day. Another thing that being outside done, gets you vitamins. Vitamin D which is absorbed from sunlight and is needed for the body is picked up while outside. Also being outside gives one fresh oxygen which benefits the lungs.
Staying indoors all day is known to be harmful to the body but what about the mind. I believe that staying indoors too much without physical interaction with friends or family is incredibly harmful the one's mental health and can cause people to lose their social skills. I noticed this happening to people during the Covid-19 pandemic and I watched them lose some of their social skills due to spending extended periods indoors and not as much time outdoors interacting with friends or family. This indoor behavior is very negative to one's mental health and can cause one to act differently than they normally would if they were outside with people instead of being stuck inside.
Overall I believe the benefits of regularly being outside, whether it’s by oneself or with friends and family, far outweigh the benefits of staying inside all day by oneself.
Hi Gavin,
ReplyDeleteStarting off, I found a couple of grammar issues but I was able to understand what you were saying. For example “a pleasant experience too many.” In this situation it was just a misuse of a different form of ‘to.’ I think you did a great job with describing your side of the argument and why you chose that side but I think you could’ve bettered the overall paper by formatting it for the school magazine as in the prompt. You could do this by addressing the class where you discussed the topic and teacher who assigned you the article. When looking at the rubric, I would say you had “clear expression, with a range of language.” As I said before, there were a couple of occasional errors but didn’t impede communication. Text is clearly organized and ideas are developed clearly. I would say the task is generally achieved, you showed your opinion fully but never really touched on the idea that it was meant for the school newspaper. Audience is engaged and words like ‘you,’ ‘your’ and ‘yourself’ are used throughout the text. Overall, I’d give you a 15/25
Hello Gavin Lang,
ReplyDeleteI think that this blog was pretty good. I think that you have done a good job of organizing your points and stating your opinion on this topic. I think that you could have formatted the text better to fit the guidelines of the school magazine. For example you said "The question of whether or not people are spending enough time outside is one that is highly debated." Instead of giving a title to this essay. You could also have divided up the sections with different titles to make it a little more organized. There were also a lot of grammar mistakes in your text.
I think that you had a clear expression with a wide range of language that fit with the text. I do however think that you had a good amount of grammar errors but they did not heavily affect the message you were talking about. I think that your text was clearly organized. I think that you had also engaged the audience and done a very good job of this. Overall I would give you a 14/25. Great Job!
Hello Gavin, beautiful argument. Your organization was clear and so were your ideas. I found a few grammar errors throughout but they don't impede communication. For example, "Can make people act differently and aren't good for your mental health." Other than that t=your expression is clear and you used a range if language. I also saw the use of complex sentences often. You kept the audience addressed but to engage them you could add some things about the school or activities in our local area since it is for a school magazine. Overall I would give you a 14/25
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